Feedback on Version 2.0 of the elevator pitch

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Version 2 is a big improvement. I'd suggest a couple changes to tighten things up a notch: 1) "international higher education institutions" -> "international tertiary institutions" (I think "tertiary" is well known, and is more specific than "higher education", no?), 2) "learners gain the opportunity to develop" -> "learners can develop".

Dave Lane, Christchurch, NZ - https://davelane.nz (talk)‎08:47, 25 May 2016

I agree with 'learners can develop' - much more direct language. 2 verbs is muddy. I'm OK either way with HE vs tertiary, happy to go with the majority.

Slambert (talk)‎17:28, 25 May 2016
 

I prefer "higher education," to try to target the "VOA Special English" vocabulary.

Jim Tittsler (talk)‎19:01, 26 May 2016
 
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