Writing in labor and employment relations3/Grading comments for memo and progress report

Many people are having the same problem in the Memo - it is TOO GENERAL. There are few reseached facts and documented evidence of your claims. For example, if you say that automation is going to increase then obviously it is going to cost less to produce goods / services. Otherwise, why would a company consider automation.

Because of the lack of documented evidence and quantifiable outcomes it leaves the reader with the impression that the Memo is not properly-researched - and is more of a brain dump - like you just wrote this off the top of your head, tightened up the sentence construction and typos and submitted the document. Unfortunately, it doesn't deserve a higher mark - and in the real world, if you handed in something like this, your superiors would not be pleased.

BE AWARE OF DUBIOUS CLAIMS – DO YOU HAVE ACTUAL DATA / EVIDENCE TO SUPPORT and PROVE WHAT YOU ARE CLAIMING / SAYING? IF YOU ARE SAYING STATISTICS, THEN PROVIDE THE EVIDENCE / EXAMPLE OF THE STATISTIC.

You need to provide the details, not fill up the paragraphs with words you already said.

For the Final Assignment - you need to go into detail regarding your claims - put the top reason up front and then defend and/or explain it. It you are going to say there are job losses - then how many people are going to lose their jobs? (If you can't find the number, then do research of a comparable site in a different location and make the assumptions / do the math, and then apply it to your situation.) Be aware of percentages - a decrease in employment from 2 to 1 person, is a 50% decrease - no need for drama to prove your point.

For people that focus on Government / Community Impacts - government employs millions of people - which ones are you talking about municipal, state, federal? And which department in the government - health and human services, labor, transportation, agriculture, commerce - which is it? You have to go much, much deeper in qualifying and explaining your rationale to management - so they are informed as to what they have to do, and what are the impacts that they will have to mitigate / de-risk. This responsibility for alerting and informing management is on your shoulders. It is serious and important.