I have gone ahead and done the following related to Mark's suggestions:

# 3 added semi-colon
# 4 removed text after AND
# 5 removed item entirely


On point 2... This format was suggested by Lydia. Perhaps she could further explain how she thinks this will be best used.

Note that if you click on the History tab you can see (and return to) earlier versions...

--Brian Evans 04:45, 6 May 2009 (UTC)

16:45, 6 May 2009