Career Development/Thank You Note

Original
Hi George, Thank you for lunch and meeting with me today. Everytime I learn more about this position I become more interested in what you do. I know my natural ability to organize and provide administrative support would greatly increase the effectiveness of your business. It seems very clear to me, that it would be a pleasure to be part of your team. I hope we can continue our discussions. I look forward to hearing from you soon. Yours truly,

Ann Washington (name changed)

Revised
Hi George, It was a pleasure meeting you today, and learning more about this position and its scope of responsibilities. Suffice to say, I am excited and encouraged by the prospect of working with you / Unique Homes: it is indeed, a 'unique' opportunity that is a natural fit for my career interests and personal goals. I look forward to the next steps, and discussing how I can fit into your future plans. Yours truly, Ann Washington (name changed)