Talk:Kick start your heart

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Final change019:08, 11 April 2010
Changes needed014:27, 24 March 2010

Final change

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Dmccabe (talk)19:08, 11 April 2010

Changes needed

Hi folks,

This is coming along well; there are some changes needed before final grading.

Your figures have duplicate numbering. Each needs a unique number and each should be cited somewhere in the text.


Rather than computer paper, give the dimensions you used.

You have one figure on the left; let's move it to the right or perhaps into a second gallery.

Biological coverage: Expand this section to describe what typically happens during exercise:

  • What happens to muscles?
  • What do they need?
  • What do they produce?
  • How does heart and breathing rate relate to the needs of the muscles?
  • Why is regular excercise excercise important?  In fact, please add a health connection near the end and relate that to Phys Ed standards.


I thought you had video?


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Video[edit | edit source]

This lesson plan desperately needs a video clip illustrating the concept. The lesson works very well, but video would demonstrate just how well it works in a way that can't be captured by still photography. Once changes have been made, you should delete the text ''{{Clip}}''from your page.


And the title?  Can you offer some other suggestions for that.  Let me know when you have agreed.  I think it poorly reflects the content.


Otherwise, I think this looks very good.


Nice work


Dmccabe (talk)14:38, 25 February 2010